Zireh:Cypher-Steel Release Jutsu

Subject: Zireh:Cypher-Steel Release Jutsu 10th September 2013, 11:21 pm

Passives

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Ninjutsu

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Taijutsu

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Kenjutsu

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Shurikenjutsu

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Kaizu Rikigaku

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Posts : 1947 Join date : 2011-01-17

Celestial Alloy Generation – this can't grant a dojutsu, other than that add it allows them to withstand damage equal to their rank

Jiraigan Awakening – put when the user is defeated with the use of weaponry, make it say the weaponry must have been the last blow, because there is the case where a weapon was used in battle but not the cause of the defeat, i.e. last blow. Also sense chakra one rank above your own, chakra in a person's body isn't ranked, so just say you can sense chakra.

Stage One – for awakening it, I do not want it awakened by a 1v1 where you are on the same level as your opponent yet are losing by a little. No hope for victory, better be a blow out, like you literally stood no chance what so ever.

Stage Two – change activation method, because things can seem useless in different ways, if you don't wanna change the activation then specify the conditions. No flying.

Stage Three – activation method is fine. Why did you suddenly get the ability to use electromagnetic waves, its a no on that one anyway.

Trapping Cage Imprisonment – add that is a Barrier Ninjutsu, and if it reacts to others chakra, its a minimum of C-rank, but chakra wasted will be one rank below the target's rank. Kage's will be counted as SS, bijuus vary but they are a minimum of S-rank.

Warping Blade Dissolution – you will have to waste chakra equal to the weapon's rank, thats all

Alloy Drill – because of the weight, while activated add your speed is dropped by one rank

360 Shrapnel Barrage – say it moves at B-rank speeds

Metal Clone – it can resist A-rank jutsus and below and moves at a speed two ranks lower than yours

Dragon King Advent - Taijutsu is increased by one rank and the dragon can withstand S-rank and lower jutsus. Can fly at S-rank speeds, blasts released deal S-rank damage and move at A-rank speeds. Add it requires A-rank chakra each post to maintain, Restoration process takes B-rank chakra. Also vulnerable to magnetic jutsus.

Steel hand-chop – its a nintaijutsu, also increases your strength by one rank, instead of dealing specific damage itself

Special Body Defense – Its nintaijutsu, unless you can give a better reason how you are hardening your body, but I feel whatever you put will lead to nintaijutsu regardless.

Gladiator's Glory – man how does that even remotely sound taijutsu to you. You are clearly making use of shape manipulation, its also nintaijutsu. If its heavy, say it reduces your speed by 1-rank as long as your strength tier is below B-rank. Once B-rank no speed loss.

Rocket Jab – more shape manipulation, its nintaijutsu. Can only shatter c-rank unless you waste more chakra to make it stronger, in which then you can shatter stronger defenses

Blacksmith Strike – Ninjutsu, and take out it encases them for 7 posts and add it requires A-rank strength tier to break free, it might keep them encased longer.

Log Splitting Technique – Really, thats nintaijutsu

Steel Bullet Barrage – its Ninjutsu, bullets move at A-rank speeds, can pierce through A-rank defenses

Titanium Drilling Bullets – Ninjutsu, lets say they can move at S-rank speeds, but still pierce through A-rank defenses

Wrath of Hephasteus – Ninjutsu, they can withstand S-rank jutsus

Platinum Fist of Fury – I don't get it, why is it a possible one-hit kill technique, this jutsu actually has little detail

Bindings of the demon world – Chains can pierce equal to your rank.

Bleeding Edge – damage is equal to one rank lower than your rank

Five Point Imprisonment – Can be broken by B-rank or higher jutsus

Alloy Intoxication – does the poison kill? You didn't put what the poison does.

Heavy Metal Growth – it requires a min of A-rank strength to lift, any lower they cannot.

Raining Rod Storm – can pierce through B-rank defenses, move at B-rank speeds

Pillars of Hephasteus – stopping other jutsus is a no, because your explanation makes no sense in why it would stop other jutsus. Say the blades come out of the ground at A-rank speeds

First Realm of Hephasteus – can pierce through S-rank defenses

Shuriken Shower – shuriken move at D-rank speeds

Shuriken of the Demon World – if hidden under illusion then this is part genjutsu, fake shuriken move at C-rank speeds

Shuriken Detonation – explodes with C-rank damage and cannot lock on, your reasoning for the lock on doesnt make sense

Shuriken Cloning – make note of the clone rules, the amount of clones will go by that

Shuriken Clone Detonation – make the damage vary on how many clones are out.

Shuriken Manipulation – doesn't really need to be a jutsu seems like something anybody can do, but nothing wrong with it

Spinning Column – shuriken fly at A-rank speeds

Shuriken Pillar – so anybody caught inside the middle is reduced to mulch?

Shadows of Death Bleeding River – how long does it last, put 3 posts.

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0/1 SSS-rank specialty weapon
0/1 SS-rank specialty weapons
0/2 SS-rank weapons
3/5 S-rank weapons
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0/3 Medium puppet designs
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Posts : 1947 Join date : 2011-01-17

Zen wrote:: Celestial Alloy Generation – this can't grant a dojutsu, other than that add it allows them to withstand damage equal to their rank

Jiraigan Awakening – put when the user is defeated with the use of weaponry, make it say the weaponry must have been the last blow, because there is the case where a weapon was used in battle but not the cause of the defeat, i.e. last blow. Also sense chakra one rank above your own, chakra in a person's body isn't ranked, so just say you can sense chakra.

Stage One – for awakening it, I do not want it awakened by a 1v1 where you are on the same level as your opponent yet are losing by a little. No hope for victory, better be a blow out, like you literally stood no chance what so ever.

Stage Two – change activation method, because things can seem useless in different ways, if you don't wanna change the activation then specify the conditions. No flying.

Stage Three – activation method is fine. Why did you suddenly get the ability to use electromagnetic waves, its a no on that one anyway.

Trapping Cage Imprisonment – add that is a Barrier Ninjutsu, and if it reacts to others chakra, its a minimum of C-rank, but chakra wasted will be one rank below the target's rank. Kage's will be counted as SS, bijuus vary but they are a minimum of S-rank.

Warping Blade Dissolution – you will have to waste chakra equal to the weapon's rank, thats all

Alloy Drill – because of the weight, while activated add your speed is dropped by one rank

360 Shrapnel Barrage – say it moves at B-rank speeds

Metal Clone – it can resist A-rank jutsus and below and moves at a speed two ranks lower than yours

Dragon King Advent - Taijutsu is increased by one rank and the dragon can withstand S-rank and lower jutsus. Can fly at S-rank speeds, blasts released deal S-rank damage and move at A-rank speeds. Add it requires A-rank chakra each post to maintain, Restoration process takes B-rank chakra. Also vulnerable to magnetic jutsus.

Steel hand-chop – its a nintaijutsu, also increases your strength by one rank, instead of dealing specific damage itself

Special Body Defense – Its nintaijutsu, unless you can give a better reason how you are hardening your body, but I feel whatever you put will lead to nintaijutsu regardless.

Gladiator's Glory – man how does that even remotely sound taijutsu to you. You are clearly making use of shape manipulation, its also nintaijutsu. If its heavy, say it reduces your speed by 1-rank as long as your strength tier is below B-rank. Once B-rank no speed loss.

Rocket Jab – more shape manipulation, its nintaijutsu. Can only shatter c-rank unless you waste more chakra to make it stronger, in which then you can shatter stronger defenses

Blacksmith Strike – Ninjutsu, and take out it encases them for 7 posts and add it requires A-rank strength tier to break free, it might keep them encased longer.

Log Splitting Technique – Really, thats nintaijutsu

Steel Bullet Barrage – its Ninjutsu, bullets move at A-rank speeds, can pierce through A-rank defenses

Titanium Drilling Bullets – Ninjutsu, lets say they can move at S-rank speeds, but still pierce through A-rank defenses

Wrath of Hephasteus – Ninjutsu, they can withstand S-rank jutsus

Platinum Fist of Fury – I don't get it, why is it a possible one-hit kill technique, this jutsu actually has little detail

Bindings of the demon world – Chains can pierce equal to your rank.

Bleeding Edge – damage is equal to one rank lower than your rank

Five Point Imprisonment – Can be broken by B-rank or higher jutsus

Alloy Intoxication – does the poison kill? You didn't put what the poison does.

Heavy Metal Growth – it requires a min of A-rank strength to lift, any lower they cannot.

Raining Rod Storm – can pierce through B-rank defenses, move at B-rank speeds

Pillars of Hephasteus – stopping other jutsus is a no, because your explanation makes no sense in why it would stop other jutsus. Say the blades come out of the ground at A-rank speeds

First Realm of Hephasteus – can pierce through S-rank defenses

Shuriken Shower – shuriken move at D-rank speeds

Shuriken of the Demon World – if hidden under illusion then this is part genjutsu, fake shuriken move at C-rank speeds

Shuriken Detonation – explodes with C-rank damage and cannot lock on, your reasoning for the lock on doesnt make sense

Shuriken Cloning – make note of the clone rules, the amount of clones will go by that

Shuriken Clone Detonation – make the damage vary on how many clones are out.

Shuriken Manipulation – doesn't really need to be a jutsu seems like something anybody can do, but nothing wrong with it

Spinning Column – shuriken fly at A-rank speeds

Shuriken Pillar – so anybody caught inside the middle is reduced to mulch?

Shadows of Death Bleeding River – how long does it last, put 3 posts.

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